Fantastic Friday Writing
Adventures are the pits…
Stop at 00:11 Discuss using mix-pair-share / round robin (Kagan Co-operative learning structures) how the boy might be feeling at the top of the slide. Children to come up with varied vocabulary to describe feelings. The teacher at this point needs to guide some children to develop their responses. Teacher to also write these up for display so the children can use these as part of their writing.
At this point introduce the 2ad and ad,same ad sentence types (Alan Peat Exciting Sentences). Model to the children how to use these by writing your own sentence based on the video. Then ask the children to do the same and then to share with the class if they feel confident enough. (Do this on their jotting sheets).
Stop again at 00:15 – What is he scared of? How do we know he is scared? How else might we know he is scared? What happens to us when we are scared? (Hear beats faster, sweaty, heavy breathing). Model how we can write this to show the reader he is scared rather than just writing the boy was scared. (This is called show not tell)
STOP at 00:23 – Very important to not go past this point. Up until now the children have an image to use to write their beginning of the story of the boy. Now, however they will need to use their creative juices to think of where the ball pool will take him. What adventure will he go on? What will happen to him when he falls into the ball pool? Where could he go? Ask the children to discuss and then share all their ideas. Following this the children will then be given the beginning of the story and then be given time to complete the story as they see fit. With the boy going on some sort of adventure. But where to? How did he eventually get out of the ball pool? Did anyone help him? What happened to him when he was down there?
A planning frame to plan out their adventure will be used to enable the children to plan their writing out and my own version of the story shared with them. The point being here to show the children how not to get carried away with the adventure but to keep it very simple.
Hope you enjoy using this great video in your own writing lessons. I will post work completed on here when it is finished.
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I'm a deputy head in Scarborough, England and love using media and tech to develop writing. I'm also a keen advocate of Learning Without Limits and believe in a games based approach to developing mathematicians.